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Beatnik Dream

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I sit in a room, surrounded by darkness,
Engulfed by silence, lost in nothingness.

Broken by a sound -
The film crackles, the reels click as they turn
And Greenwich Village appears before my eyes;
The pulsating heart of the Beat generation.

I smell the cigarettes and the cannabis,
I feel the jazz vibrations filling my soul,
I hear voices of genius, horns and shouting,
I taste the air polluted with creativity, revolution.
I see the stuff of legends.

Kerouac's face before me, cigarette hanging from his lips,
Kerouac's hands, fingers that carressed thousands with the words they wrote,
Kerouac, eternal genius, soul-mate, idol,
     before he drowned in a bottle of whiskey.

I see flashes of the Gaslight;
Sax; trumpet; sweat; piano; love; pain; life.
The duotone glory of the Beats,
The dynamic lives of the poets;
Meaningfully dirty, sinfully profound - liberators of literature,
Looking up at the world from the gutters of the Village,
Peering down at society from their throwns of knowledge.

Benny-fuelled mayhem of friendship,
Of discovery, invention,
Sex and drugs,
Love and loyalty.

And I see myself amongst them;
I appear in grainy black and white, amidst this gang
that represent the beatitude of existence, to join them
In sleepless nights and broken mornings
Spent in rundown apartment blocks
Smelling of whiskey and smoke
And overflowing with opinions, ideas, insanity;
Circles of cross-legged word swilling artists of the night.
Close-ups of each stubble-strewn face
Amid the endless party of their lives.

In the background the wail of a trumpet,
The laugh of a piano,
The moan of a saxophone;
The soundtrack of freedom.
I was watching a BBC Four documentary about American folk music last night, in which there was some archive footage of Jack Kerouac in Greenwich Village smoking a cigarette and looking a bit bemused. And my heart skipped a beat (unintentional pun!), because I adore that man and wish that I could have been there, a part of the Beat Generation. So that's what the poem is about basically.

Obviously I'm not really a poet, so God knows whether this is actually any good or not. As always I am fully open to critique and will be very grateful of any suggestions for improvement.

For :iconthewrittenrevolution:
I'm especially concerned about the structure and whether it disrupts the flow of the poem? And if it does how could I improve it? Also the clarity - do people understand it? How is the pacing?
But more than anything, does it make you wish you were there? I wanted to portray the excitement and lust for life that the Beats instil in me - does that come across?

Anyway, please everyone, do tell me what you think (= <3
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meoartist's avatar
I think you kept to your rhythm well. Its one of those poems thats long enough to create the levels of the movement without getting lost, Its Dynamic which is good. I'm also not a Poet, (and personally don't really like poetry) But I thought it was well written.